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Bored
May 5, 2007 9:22:57 GMT
Post by justinemd34910 on May 5, 2007 9:22:57 GMT
I'm bored and haven't been accepted yet, so I'm going to role-play with myself.
Daggers echoed softly in the cave, they struck the rock in a steady, fast beat. The equine lifted it's pillars high with pride. The equine was showing off, yet again. A loud breath came from her mug, making her ebony forelock jump from her apex. She was as light as a feather, couldn't way more. She wasn't trotting in the cave, she was floating.
Her coffee colored pelt shined brightly in the beating sun as she exited the cave. She gave a small smirk, how wonderful she felt. She could barley contain her fiery spirit from shouting out. Finely she gave up the battle. "He's dead!" She cried, breaking into a full gallop. She raced around a tree, shouting for joy. Oh how happy she was.
She flung herself to the hard ground, her chest rising and falling quickly. She might be celebrating, but it was hard work. When her breath was returned to her bod she stood. Not quickly like most would be with a slow grace not matched by others. She tried to restrain herself, but it was imposable to hold up that wall at all.
Don't even ask me what that was, my creative imagination went wild. Don't even tell me how bad that was.
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Bored
May 5, 2007 19:24:06 GMT
Post by s p o n g e on May 5, 2007 19:24:06 GMT
Hehe that was a good post ! I would give some 'conrstructive-critisim' right now, but I best be off posting on all my other RP sites I have joined at will ...
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Bored
May 6, 2007 11:44:06 GMT
Post by Skin. on May 6, 2007 11:44:06 GMT
That's a nice post! The only advice I have is to describe the horse's thoughts and feelings in greater depth. Apart from that, it's very good >.<
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